NaPoWriMo 6: Erasure Poem


All the prompts are from The Significant League FB group. Day 6’s prompt wants us to write an Erasure Poem which is a fun thing to do.

Here is the original
The Cinnamon Peeler – Poem by Michael Ondaatje

If I were a cinnamon peeler
I would ride your bed
and leave the yellow bark dust
on your pillow.

Your breasts and shoulders would reek
you could never walk through markets
without the profession of my fingers
floating over you. The blind would
stumble certain of whom they approached
though you might bathe
under rain gutters, monsoon.

Here on the upper thigh
at this smooth pasture
neighbor to your hair
or the crease
that cuts your back. This ankle.
You will be known among strangers
as the cinnamon peeler’s wife.

I could hardly glance at you
before marriage
never touch you
— your keen nosed mother, your rough brothers.
I buried my hands
in saffron, disguised them
over smoking tar,
helped the honey gatherers…

When we swam once
I touched you in water
and our bodies remained free,
you could hold me and be blind of smell.
You climbed the bank and said

this is how you touch other women
the grasscutter’s wife, the lime burner’s daughter.
And you searched your arms
for the missing perfume.
and knew
what good is it
to be the lime burner’s daughter
left with no trace
as if not spoken to in an act of love
as if wounded without the pleasure of scar.

You touched
your belly to my hands
in the dry air and said
I am the cinnamon
peeler’s wife. Smell me.
_______________________________________________

Erasure Poem by me

Cinnamon

your

yellow dust



shoulders 

through markets

without 
you

blind

you might bathe

under rain gutters

thigh
 smooth

hair

cut back

You a stranger



I

touch you

your nose

hands

honey
 

our bodies remain free

You hold me



you touch

with no trace

no love

as if 



you touch

dry air

Peel. Smell me.
©Reena Prasad

 

 

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